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The past is behind
But I still feel the ripples
Disrupting my flow.
Yes, another haiku.

Written 2nd July.

For :icondeltabeta:'s contest

(expect a lot of haiku from me over the next little while. I'm not doing haikuwrimo but I just... can't stop writing haiku!)
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Given 2008-07-10
In The Past by *almalobana, the images and words are felt so strongly. It is indeed a charming addition to our wonderful Haiku month. ( Featured by LadyLincoln )
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VectorNexus Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013
Beautiful. We are as droplets of water in a larger pool, rippling out, chiming and effecting others.
It's melancholy of those who's ripples aren't large enough that their ebb and flow never reach or collide with anothers.
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Jukih Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012
I really like it, it's very soft
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Alura-the-Sage Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, the beauty of haiku! This is a prime example.
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:iconmisslorsta:
misslorsta Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011
Beautifully said.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011   Writer
Thank you.
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Vysryder000 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2011
thats really good! it seems we have something in common :D HAIKUS FTW!!!!!
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:icongodatesomesatan:
godatesomesatan Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008
!! I did not know you got a DD. Of course, if anyone's fault, it's mine. All the same. Congratulations
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008   Writer
Thank you :)

it was exciting.
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:icongodatesomesatan:
godatesomesatan Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008
I remember you told me you secretly always hoped for it. That's pretty awesome.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008   Writer
Yeah I know, thanks :D

Though, y'know, just to be picky... I wish it had been on a piece I liked/was proud of, rather than a haiku. I mean haiku are fun, I just prefer my other work.

But then I'm just picky, aren't I?

Hang on, no... that just means I've got high standards. Or is that the line for when it comes to dating? I can never remember... :lol:
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godatesomesatan Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2008
LOL. I wouldn't want my Haiku to be a DD. No, no.. I am not proud of it... only one. I think it's in my scraps section too, but whatever.

I don't know, like.. Haiku is its own genre, if you ask me. Which implicitly means [according to me] that it isn't representative of your gallery. Which is contradictory? Kind of. I understand, really. But then, I'm sure people would not be happy to know you're ungrateful. lol.
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almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2008   Writer
I know, I can't be like 'dammit why didn't you pick something else' because that would be waaaaay ungrateful... But at the same time, it's like... it's a haiku, y'know? I don't like writing them, I just went through a little stage where I couldn't write anything else... Sucks for me, eh?

Hmm. Oh well. That's life, I guess.
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Debzx6 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2008
this is so amazing. its so simple but makes u think so much.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2008   Writer
thank you, and for the fave :)
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hvnnast Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2008
This is very powerful to me and I can relate completely.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2008   Writer
thanks very much, and for the fave :)
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hvnnast Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2008
Absolutely :)
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jockmo42 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
One of the best I've ever read. So many people just throw words together, but some of them really think about how they want to say it, and make it work.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thanks very much :)
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AustN-Acer Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Traditional Artist
You are so fantastic wit your words!
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thank you :)
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AustN-Acer Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Traditional Artist
No problem! ^^
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VisualPoetress Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Digital Artist
One of the most powerfully packed haikus I have ever seen. Says alot in such few words ...... Excellent Work :clap:
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thanks very much :)
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Chuquita Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
I think we all feel that way sometimes.
Profound stuff, congratulations on the DD. :thumbsup:
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thanks very much, glad it's written in a way you can relate to
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Blade6420 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
"haikuwrimo"-- that made me chuckle. xD

great word selection!
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thank you :D
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:iconspamuel:
Spamuel Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Writer
Wonderful. Made me give out a short "ah...".
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thank you :)
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:iconazraelengel:
azraelengel Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
So fitting.

Wonderful.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thanks very much :)
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SpenserG89 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
perfect. :+favlove:

grats on the DD!
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
Thank you very much :)
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Bookmen Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yup that sums up my life right now pretty well.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
Glad it's written in a way you can relate to it :)
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OLoboCanta Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
excellent :)
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thank you :)
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AshuraSK Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
This is the story of my life... It's hard to let go of the past...

You worded this perfectly. Great job. <3
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thanks very much, glad it's written in a way you can relate to :)
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blackmoon1217 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
Man, I can relate to this...
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KetsuekiRyu Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on getting the DD. Wonderful observation.
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
thank you very much
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Kitamai Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
Very simple but I like it. It gets the point across so well and I think most people can relate. I certainly can. Congrats on the DD
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
Yeah, I'm glad it's written in a way that most people can relate to.

Thanks :)
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:iconusagi-chan94:
Usagi-chan94 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
wow...very deep...awesome...see ya round! :D
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Writer
Thanks :)
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horselover0001 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
This is beautiful! :o I hope you do well on the contest! Good luck! :clap:
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:iconalmalobana:
almalobana Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Writer
Thank you very much, that's very nice of you to say :)

And thanks for the fave and the watch too :)
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blasianonna Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good haiku!
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