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Literature
brighter.
i. you say my name like
it was meant
to be pretty.
x. you told me that
watching candles glow
in the night was beautiful;
but they are nothing
compared to you.
iii. you could take out
my heart. you could
rip it, and you could
put it back together and
make me into something
beautiful.
z. you glow
the prettiest shade
of silver.
Literature
evaporate
he doesnt need
me anymore
but would not
hurt me by
saying so
so I will clear
a path for him
by pretending
not to care
until he forgets
to miss me
Literature
could have been's.
you told me we couldve been so lovely.
i said no. the only lovely things are broken things, and i said i would not break, i would not break, i would not -
you closed my eyes and said it was too late for that, and i shouldnt waste my time with denials.
-
i asked you if i could read the chapters of the story of life out of order. because isnt it all just the same?
the only thing that changes is how we react; how we think and how we feel.
im not changing.
and if i am:
its not for the best.
-
could i be the one that does the breaking, for once?
-
you told me that our love was like this:
black holes that
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hmm
what to say? Well this took a fair while to write... Completed 18th April 2008.
That's about it. You can make up your own mind about it.
what to say? Well this took a fair while to write... Completed 18th April 2008.
That's about it. You can make up your own mind about it.
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"Your lips, soft as the sunlight,
Falling now and then on mine.
A whisper, soft and gentle,
Sending shivers down my spine.
The beat of your heart, steady,
Steady, keeping time to love,
Then faster, furiously,
An invite to breathe again."
That opening segment is brilliant, mostly because of the rhythm, to me. I read it through a couple of times, and by the second go through I'd picked up the excellent metre going there (most notably the bolded lines). It sort of reminds me of 'The Raven' by Poe, and how verse after verse it keeps a wonderful trundling rhythm going.
I'm wroking my way through your gallery, but as per your latest journal I sought this one out early. You're right, it's deffinitely one of your best. Keep it up
Falling now and then on mine.
A whisper, soft and gentle,
Sending shivers down my spine.
The beat of your heart, steady,
Steady, keeping time to love,
Then faster, furiously,
An invite to breathe again."
That opening segment is brilliant, mostly because of the rhythm, to me. I read it through a couple of times, and by the second go through I'd picked up the excellent metre going there (most notably the bolded lines). It sort of reminds me of 'The Raven' by Poe, and how verse after verse it keeps a wonderful trundling rhythm going.
I'm wroking my way through your gallery, but as per your latest journal I sought this one out early. You're right, it's deffinitely one of your best. Keep it up