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hmm

what to say? Well this took a fair while to write... Completed 18th April 2008.

That's about it. You can make up your own mind about it.
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"Your lips, soft as the sunlight,
Falling now and then on mine.
A whisper, soft and gentle,
Sending shivers down my spine.
The beat of your heart, steady,
Steady, keeping time to love,
Then faster, furiously,
An invite to breathe again."


That opening segment is brilliant, mostly because of the rhythm, to me. I read it through a couple of times, and by the second go through I'd picked up the excellent metre going there (most notably the bolded lines). It sort of reminds me of 'The Raven' by Poe, and how verse after verse it keeps a wonderful trundling rhythm going.

I'm wroking my way through your gallery, but as per your latest journal I sought this one out early. You're right, it's deffinitely one of your best. Keep it up =D